[Alexandria177]

A traitor princess
   
   The end of peace.  The Taira Clan's rule had come to an end and the peaceful world began to crumble.  The scions of the Minamoto Clan, who in the past had lost to the Taira Clan, rose up and began to battle the Tairas.  The supreme general of the Minamoto Clan, Yoritomo Minamoto, took control of the eastern Japan a mere two months prior.  Yoshinaka Kiso, a cousin of Yoritomo's, is now a  positioning an immense force towards the capital.   

              Then Yoritomo's younger brother, Yoshitsune decided to followhis brother and raise an army.  Compared to his brother, he only had a few soldiers, however Yoshitsune began to gather the strongest ninjas from around the country to create a small, yet elite, force.

   Eight of the best ninjas were in Yoshitsune's army.  There is  Enya, from the fire village, a sexy playboy.  Hyuga, also from the fire village, is obedient and kind in front of his master, but has a mean streak when he is not in front of his master.  Hattori Hanzo Kazemasa, from the wind village, has a reliabiltiy in completing missions.   Hyosuke, from the water village, is  a playful micheivous ninja that is loved by everyone.  Sohma, from the wind village, is gentle and protective brother but has an unknown background which leaves him with a artificial right arm.  Mizuki, from the water village, is a ninja of few words and emotions.  Benkei Musashibou, from the Minamoto clan, was a rude monk, but Yoshitsune left a big impession on him.  Last and least is Goyo, from the main land, had met Yoshitsune, and quickly began ninja training and got the skills of the shinobi.

   A young princess named Sakura Yui, was being punished because she would send letters to the  Minamoto.  The letters contained infomation on her father's plans to override the Minamoto.  The letters were recieved by Hanzo, also  known as Hattori, whose saw Sakura's falcon go in circles around their camp.  The letters were found out to be true.  The punishment of betraying her father, was 40 lashings,  no longer a heir to the clan, and banishment.  She would have recieved death, but she escape on a black horse.  

   She was in the midst of the battlefield fight the Taira Clan wearing full body armor except it did not cover her right upper arm.  It showed off a dragon.  "Asaura fire dragon!"  She shouted loud and clear.  She quickly took off her helmet and floated in the middle of the sky.  She quickly transformed into a fire dragon.  She prounces on the Tairan soldiers instantly killing them.  She didn't prounced on the Genjian soldiers which was in command of Yoshitsune.  

   "What in the world?"  A Tairan soldier cried out, "Why is a dragon here and why is it only prouncing on our soldiers?

   "I don't know, but we have to shoot it down." Another soldier said.  

   "Get the archers, we can't have them shoot down the dragon."   A Genjian soldiers said.

   "Retreat!"  The  Tairan soldiers keep on saying so everybody that was in the Tairan army heard the command.  Sakura went into the woods and transformed back into herself.  

   She climbed into the nearest tree and travelled by limb to limb so just in case anybody recongized her she could quickly hid and camoflauge herself.  She went to the Minamoto camp.  As she went to the camp, Yoshitsune's ninjas were there surrounding Yoshitsune.  "Who are you woman?"  Hanzo said.

   "Do not fear me, I am simply an ally." Sakura said.  "You may know me as the traitor princess."

   "If you are her, then why are you here and why aren't you in the palace?" Hyuga said in a forceful tone."

   "Banishment." She said in a sadful tone.  

   "First the dragon, then the girl saying she is an ally, what's next?"  Enya said.
   "You said dragon, right?"  Sakura asked Enya.

   "Yes, I seen it with my eyes as long with Hyosuke, Benkei, and Goyo seen it."  Enya said.

   "Why did you asked?" Yoshitsune asked.

   "You could say that I know who the dragon is."

   "If you know, then who is it?" Sohma asked.

   "You find out," she walked backed from them, " Asaura Fire Dragon!" She said loud and clear.  She floated in the air transforming into a dragon.  Gold, yellow, red, and orange scales form on her while she was getting longer and more snake like.  She desending towards the ground, with the shocked faces of the Yoshitsune and his ninjas.  "Now, do you believe me now?"

   "Yes, we do. We owe you thanks and our grattitude for what you have done for us." Yoshitsune said.

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[Aiwethryne]

That was certainly a plot twist. For anyone who had played most of the routes, reading exposition (first three paragraphs) is a bit too much like regurgitating facts. If you left that entire chunk out, it would make it more of a desirable read for those of whom I imagine are your target audiences. Anyone who hadn't played the game would be just as fine without it, as well, and they can pick up notes on setting and character names throughout the story.

I don't know if this was intentional, but calling Goyo "last and least" is quite a statement against the usual literary cliché of "last but not least." There were also some minor term confusions, like "override" instead of 'overthrow.' All you need to do is check a dictionary to make sure that the words are in the correct context. In formal, non-news article writing, numbers that do not exceed a hundred would be written longhand, not in digit form. People would accept it if it were times or certain money amounts, though.

[Alexandria177]

Thank you!  I love to write a lot, but I suck at English.  I always make minor mistakes.